Wednesday, April 21, 2010

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Is my smile still plastered on,
shouted through a foundation
of uneven pavement

When will my breath
leak slowly from lungs
held in place so long,
if I let go,
it might not

When will this all be
o.k. and done,
for you to breath too

Life is delicate,
like rose petals
or lace
or even bones
because they
wither, tare and break

Time is gone
before you realize
that time is quickly passing,
like billboards while
driving fast down the 99
in a green Camaro
-lip gloss cache

If my eyes could open
to this dream,
I would gather my
thoughts,
my lessons learned

Maybe I already have

I didn't always understand
what i had until
something threatened
my perfect little world

Copyright © 2010 Alexis Hallum

14 comments:

Jodi said...

I wish I could hear your voice reading this.

Brendan T. Kelly said...

I like this a lot.
I especially like the way you break up the light, elegant, and fragile tone by using the strong, fast image of the Camero. It adds a great contrast.

Saumya said...

This is beautiful. I love the idea of comparing life to rose petals. Also, wonderful and elegant word choice. You have a great talent!! I'm in a poetry workshop right now and you would get rave reviews if you read it out loud.

TS Hendrik said...

That's what I call melancholy perfection. Fantastic.

Tamara said...

WOW! Alexis, thank you so very much for your comment on my blog! Had you not left that comment, I feel like I may have never found your blog. Your writing moves me and inspires me the way only the really great pieces can. I felt understood while reading through your work. Thank you for taking time out of your busy day to bless your readers with your gifts and talents.

JoAnn said...

Praying for you.
This reminds me of the proverb i'm obsessed with because of the words, "...a soft tongue will break a bone" Prov 25:15
We are waiting, and letting time slip by, because we can't see the end of the story, but we know that HE only gives good gifts to His children.

Barb said...

The cadence of this poem is wonderful in establishing the tone. That first stanza is a stunner. Also, you provide a universal truth - none of us really knows what we have until we think we might lose it.

creativewritingintheblackberrypatch said...

I love your poems! You have a way with words. Keep writing!

Kingston girl said...

Just beautiful! I love your work. I hope that you get a book published.
:) Thanks for following me! I love starting my morning reading your work.

Kelly McDermott-Bay said...

Great Poem.
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Grad said...

I've had a chance to look at some of the pieces you posted earlier. They are all lovely. So glad I found your blog!

The Empress said...

I love this one. I didnt tell you last time. But I love this.

It makes you want to know what happens.

June said...

Wow.
Ain't it the truth.

GreenEyes said...

I just started balling my eyes out lexis. this is my favorite out of all your work. i don't even know what to say.