Monday, June 28, 2010

computer overload

the rise
of the machine
renders me bionic
taking over brain and limbs and
crash







Copyright © 2010 Alexis Hallum

27 comments:

Barb said...

The sad part is - if we are without all the electronics, we feel "lost"! I ran this AM in the city listening to a book on tape. Usually, I scoff at the idea of the ear buds, and say I need to hear the sounds of Nature. I'm ashamed of myself! (But - the book did take my mind off the run, so it seemed to go very well...)

Carrie Burtt said...

You say it so well. Have missed your posts...glad you are back. :-)

Lydia Kang said...

Great juxtaposition of the electronic and the human parts of the world we live in. Nice!

Wanda said...

Loved your poem...Turning Into Me!

Your posts haven't been showing up on my reader...glad I stopped by!

♥...Wanda

s. m. leisinger said...

I love your poems. Sometimes I feel like a computer and I crash! Thank you for stopping by my blog.
Sharla

Whitemist said...

First time here, thank you for stopping by...i just ca not get over the title of the blog...i love it!

Sofia Sandoval said...

Nice blog, I read through some of your poems and I'm impressed. Open Mics Nights are becoming more and more popular. The people there are so supportive. I went to a writers workshop and the instructor warned about getting too caught up on the praise because then it won't challenge us to grow as writers. For now, the Open Mic is working for me because it is helping for me to step out of my comfort zone just by presenting. I'm currently seeking a writers group to edit and critique my work. I definitely recommend you read your work at an Open Mic. To both help set you free and because the composition of so much art and express makes it a memorable night.

Best Wishes,
Sofia

JoAnn said...

I feel that way right now. I'm ignoring my blog. I'm crashing in real life for the time being.
sometimes I don't have words.

The Alliterative Allomorph said...

haha, yes sometimes I think that if I pull the plug from my computer that I'll turn off too :o) great poem!

Dave King said...

Never thought of it that way before, but you're absolutely spot on!

Samantha Bennett said...

Ah, I so relate to this poem. I would now like to shut my laptop and take a walk around the neighborhood. :)

Sam Liu said...

Beautiful metaphor, suffused in a truly marvellous poem; and so true...when we work like machines, we are bound to crash one day.

Robert Lloyd said...

Great poem Alexis....Renders me bionic...I know the feeling...all day in front of the computer for work and then I go home and crash...right after using the computer lol.

SuzyQ said...

I relate to your poem so well.
Brilliant!

Susannah said...

I really like this Alexis, I have often got so caught up in working on the computer that it is like an extension of me, so can really identify with this.

In fact after working on photoshop once for a long period I actually had the urge to drag and drop something in my garden! Actually the delete button would come in handy too! lol

Julie Musil said...

Alexis, I love this! I feel like I'm about to crash sometimes from information overload! You have such a great way of telling a story with very few words. And I love this new background of the washing machines, that's so funny!

Thanks for your kind comments on my blog. I love how we're all learning together!

Arian Rey Tejano said...

wow. the transfer of energy, i can see a raw mix of science and art here. glad you're back :)

Carrie Burtt said...

I stopped back by to tell you that I have a little something for you at my blog Hope Whispers...it is under the post "thank you Ruth". Hope you have an awesome weekend! :-)

cleemckenzie said...

Yep. Have to unplug and rejoin that place of quiet uninterrupted thought before I can't reboot at all.

Enjoyed your visit at The Write Game. Thanks.

emily wierenga said...

i love, love, love the new look. and i love the poem. your words make me sing.

Delwyn said...

I like to feel grateful for the technology in my life...because without it life would be so impoverished in some ways, but I also hope that I can keep it in check and create a balance...

Happy days Alexis

Connie Arnold said...

I can really relate to this!

Vicki said...

I like the warshin machine background. Yes, and electronics overload me too, very often. Pretty poetry.

Jodi said...

Ha! Love it! And totally digging the blog design. So, so cool.

Julie Musil said...

Alexis, thanks for stopping by my blog! It's nice to chat with other writers who are doing it for the love of it.

Barb said...

Where have you been - I thought maybe on vacation with your family? I love your new look - I see you've been busy revamping. Hope to read some more poetry soon. Have a good summer, Alexis.

Annie said...

Hi Alexis,
I was just thinking of you, and wanted to say hello. I like the poem. Take care... Annie